Chapter Nine is the ninth chapter in My Immortal, and the one where the Dark Lord himself makes his first appearance and has an epic duel with our heroine. It is also where the main conflict of the story is introduced.
Author's note[]
AN: stop flaming ok! I dntn red all da boox! dis is frum da movie ok so itz nut my folt if dumbeldor swers! besuizds I SED HE HAD A HEDACHE! and da reson snap dosent lik harry now is coz hes christian and vampire is a satanist! MCR ROX!
Plot[]
Ebony, having believed Draco was cheating on her with Vampire, has fled into the Forbidden Forest, where she cries against a tree. Suddenly a man with red eyes and no nose appears on a broomstick - it's Voldemort himself! He casts an Imperius curse on Ebony, locking her in place. Ebony counters with a Crookshanks curse, making Voldemort scream in pain and fall off his broomstick. Despite the fact she was on the verge of killing the Dark Lord, Ebony stops, saying, "I felt bad for him even though I’m a sadist."
Having recovered, Voldemort tells Ebony that she must kill Vampire, or he will kill Draco. During this, Ebony realizes that it might have indeed been that Draco and Vampire had been together in the past, but were now broken up. Voldemort gives Ebony a gun, fleeing the scene on his broomstick.
Draco then arrives, and Ebony apologizes for getting irrationally upset. The two return to Hogwarts, making out as they go.
Inconsistencies and divergences from canon[]
- The Imperious and Cruciatus Curse aren't used or pronounced correctly. The actual incantation for Imperious is "Imperio", and allows the caster to control the victim, rather than make them unable to run away. Crookshanks is not the name of a spell, but instead a cat/kneazel hybrid pet that Hermione has from the third book onward.
- Voldemort is powerful enough to not use a broom or to be nearly defeated by someone who is still legally a wizard child. Voldemort wouldn't use a tool invented and used by Muggles, as they are beings that he believes are inferior.
- Enoby likely wouldn't be skilled enough to use an unforgivable curse with such skill at her young age, nor does she face any punishment for using them.
Notable quotes[]
- Then all of a suddenly, an horrible man with red eyes and no nose and everything started flying towards me on a broomstick! He didn’t have a nose (basically like Voldemort in the movie) and he was wearing all black but it was obvious he wasn’t gothic. It was…… Voldemort!
- “Crookshanks!” I shouted at him.
- I felt bad for him even though I’m a sadist so I stopped.
- Voldemort got a dude-ur-so-r*t*rded look on his face.
- "I hath telekinesis."